Rob's Revised Stuff

Hello so it looks like i might not be making it to class on Monday, out of town sorry. But ive been hard at work on my project and would love some feedback, good or bad.

Here is a link to an Html of the revised script and characters. Disregard the last part as that is just a shot list for my personal benefit.

https://pantherlink.uwm.edu/service/home/~/RobsScript.doc?auth=co&loc=en_US&id=68018&part=2&view=html

Here is a rough edit of the first scene, i had to use a friend of mine for the character of Jack when my actor in mind had some health issues. But i feel he did a really good job, but again please tell me what you think, i know its hard to tell some of the images because of the crappy youtube quality.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2EkNQKWjYa0

So if you could give me any thoughts or opinions that would be helpful since im going to hopefully finish shooting by the 5.

THANKS