2.5.09
To all that are interested,
This is a rough cut of the first two scenes of my senior project. I have not done anything to the sound so in some parts it cuts out. Also, I will not be using the specific songs on the radio bit but they are there to give an idea of what it will be like. Constructive criticism is always welcome.
https://pantherfile.uwm.edu/xythoswfs/webui/_xy-20622860_1-t_r0awUOW1
There are 950,000 strangers living in Milwaukee, each with his or her own story. My project attempts to examine the relationships of 5 of those strangers and expose some intimacies of the human condition.
Here are four shots from my project. The first one is the shot that inspired the project. The second and third were the second two shots I came up with for the project, and the fourth is an example of the tension and subtlety that will plague a lot of the video.
https://pantherfile.uwm.edu/xythoswfs/webui/_xy-17409031_1-t_KOuKSKre
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Note: I am not going to use the 4th shot for obvious reasons. It is just an example of tension. I have more usable takes shot but not captured.
Very Nice Robyn! The shoots look good and you seem to have good control over you actors. The one thing I don't feel is that we are to confined and the idea of a vast amount of people each having the same amount of importance is not reached. Even when he is outside filling up the car with gas, I feel to confined. I know you have thought about this and that those shots may not be the whole scene and in others parts of the piece this feeling will come across, like during the transitions from people to people. I just felt to confined in this group of shots and would have liked to have a wider view. But I understand that it is supposed to be intimate about each story and as I write I realize that it is supposed to be confined while we are inside each persons vineatte and during the transition we will probably get the wider view. So good job!! In the new film "Synecdoche, New York" a similar theme is explored, Philip Seymour Hoffman's character says at one point "there are no extras, everyone is a main character in their own story." something along those lines. I think you would enjoy the film!
I know you're not using the 4th shot, but it's the only one of the 4 where we can see any of the acting clearly - just based on this shot alone, I would tell them to actually tone it down a bit. Her nervous look over to him, him glancing at her, and her quickly looking away, looked like acting to me. I think it's really important for your actors to have really solid realism in their performances. Sometimes the best acting is no acting. But the stuff you showed in class before was fine in that sense, so maybe it's just that one shot. Looks great though.
Robyn, I really enjoy the clip. The colors are great and sounds pretty good (I like the silence towards the middle.) The composition is really beautiful – I really enjoyed the guy's head being cut out of the frame. How did you shot that shot with them driving? Jonathan said it first about it being confined. I really did feel that too. I think the confined feeling really works to give that tension. I for one felt awkward with the two in there – felt like I should say something. Again overall good job!
I can't say much regarding story as you said not much is included in your example, but technically it looks great. I want to do a car shot! I'm looking forward to seeing Peter and the finished product.
I agree with Jonathan (double agree).
And... your shooting, based on these few compositions, is getting a bit more interesting -- feels intentional and careful.
Very precise. Well done. I like what you seem to be doing with sound. The quietness really makes a tremendous difference in mood. Are you all done shooting? How long is the final project? My only advice would be to not make the tension overly obvious. The more subtle the better. I'm very impressed with your technical skills and ability to create something interesting out of very little action.
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